For the love of me... I can't manage to come up with a damn thesis statement about my paper o-o
I'm researching Armor, and all that applies, so, I haven't really picked a specific topic about Armor, so that leaves my thesis statement pretty open. What I was thinking of doing was the history of armor, and how it's evolved, or maybe just the different types of armor.
Help would VERY much be appreciated. >< Cause I've procrastinated, and it's due tomorrow.
Quote from: Ciro on February 21, 2010, 02:23:12 PM
For the love of me... I can't manage to come up with a damn thesis statement about my paper o-o
I'm researching Armor, and all that applies, so, I haven't really picked a specific topic about Armor, so that leaves my thesis statement pretty open. What I was thinking of doing was the history of armor, and how it's evolved, or maybe just the different types of armor.
Help would VERY much be appreciated. >< Cause I've procrastinated, and it's due tomorrow.
How about something like
Armor has saved many lives over time, and thanks to breakthroughs in technology it saves more lives everyday.
OR
Armor has played an important part in war thoughout history and has evolved drasticly over time.
Then(assuming its a 5 paragraph paper) Do a section on plate/chain, a section on older flak vest, then one on dragon skin or kevlar or something.
What type of paper are you writing? Informative, argumentative, etc.
Ah, right, good point Chaos, it's an informative
Informative, 4 to 5 pages, double spaced, at least 3 sources (Wiki is not allowed) And she wants our thesis sentence to be pretty long. Like, prolly as long as this post is gonna be, except, it has to all be one sentence. And I'm not allowed to use first person.
and @ Titan, that's what I'm trying to get at, but some how I just can't beef it up enough into a long sentence... >< That's the only thing really holding me back on this paper.
Well, that and finding good reliable sources =/
Quote from: Ciro on February 21, 2010, 02:43:42 PM
and @ Titan, that's what I'm trying to get at, but some how I just can't beef it up enough into a long sentence... >< That's the only thing really holding me back on this paper.
How about
Armor has played an important part in war thoughout history and has evolved drasticly over time, from plate armor and chain mail in the middle ages that had a hard time stopping arrows, to recent body armors such as kelvar and dragon skin body armor that can stop a bullet with ease ,and save many lives everyday.
Thanks so much~! This is what I got from it;
Armor has served an important role throughout history by evolving drastically over time; from the early leather design, the efficient arrow-stopping chain mail in the middle ages, to even the most recent body armors such as kelvar and dragon skin body armor that stop bullets with ease, saving countless lives from death and injury.
but I feel it needs something...
Since the beginning of time humanity has been no stranger to battle, whether it be against themselves or the creatures that surround them they've always needed protection, and as time passed and weapons grew in variety the need for armor increased, what began as covering your body in fur quickly lead to suits of metal, and eventually to our modern bullet-stopping kevlar and dragon skin.
I'm a shitty essay writer, I wouldn't be able to write a longer sentence than that, too many damn comas. Anyways heres a couple googled pages on armor, hope they might help.
http://www.themiddleages.net/armor.html
http://www.medieval-castle-siege-weapons.com/history-of-medieval-armor.
http://www.globalsecurity.org/military/systems/ground/body-armor2.htm
The first link is most helpful, because I'm going to be focusing on more medieval forms.
She said to look for sites that aren't trying to convince you to buy a product too.
This is just me, but I would worry less the length of the thesis, and more about the message. The thesis is essentially what you're trying to say in your paper. Encouraging people to make the thesis statement a run-on sentence strikes me as bad writing form... >_<
Trust me, if it were up to me, I'd do a short and simple thesis >> But the stupid English teacher wants me to write a long one... which.... doesn't even make sense because it's a THESIS statement! I swear, I have one of the most retarded English teacher's of all time...
Quote from: Ciro on February 21, 2010, 03:02:26 PM
Thanks so much~! This is what I got from it;
Armor has served an important role throughout history by evolving drastically over time; from the early leather design, the efficient arrow-stopping chain mail in the middle ages, to even the most recent body armors such as kelvar and dragon skin body armor that stop bullets with ease, saving countless lives from death and injury.
but I feel it needs something...
Chain-mail didn't stop arrows, it let them through the rings. PLATEMAIL on the other hand, is a different story.
@Lucifer: Lolwut? Dragon skin?
XD Thanks for bringing that up. Something in the back of my mind told me that wasn't correct, so thanks :3
I need to find a good site that explains the parts of armor, such as the helm, grieves, gauntlets, etc.
Quote from: EpicPhailure on February 21, 2010, 04:15:35 PM
@Lucifer: Lolwut? Dragon skin?
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Dragon_Skin_(body_armor)
Quote from: EpicPhailure on February 21, 2010, 04:15:35 PM
Quote from: Ciro on February 21, 2010, 03:02:26 PM
Thanks so much~! This is what I got from it;
Armor has served an important role throughout history by evolving drastically over time; from the early leather design, the efficient arrow-stopping chain mail in the middle ages, to even the most recent body armors such as kelvar and dragon skin body armor that stop bullets with ease, saving countless lives from death and injury.
but I feel it needs something...
Chain-mail didn't stop arrows, it let them through the rings. PLATEMAIL on the other hand, is a different story.
@Lucifer: Lolwut? Dragon skin?
Totally offtopic, grats on 1000 posts! :)
Quote from: yottabyte on February 21, 2010, 04:53:48 PM
Quote from: EpicPhailure on February 21, 2010, 04:15:35 PM
Quote from: Ciro on February 21, 2010, 03:02:26 PM
Thanks so much~! This is what I got from it;
Armor has served an important role throughout history by evolving drastically over time; from the early leather design, the efficient arrow-stopping chain mail in the middle ages, to even the most recent body armors such as kelvar and dragon skin body armor that stop bullets with ease, saving countless lives from death and injury.
but I feel it needs something...
Chain-mail didn't stop arrows, it let them through the rings. PLATEMAIL on the other hand, is a different story.
@Lucifer: Lolwut? Dragon skin?
Totally offtopic, grats on 1000 posts! :)
NOOO. If I realized it was my 1000th post, I would've made it more meaningful D: Oh well. Thanks.
Hey Ciro, mind sending me your essay afters its done, sources and all? XD I have a history essay due tomorrow too, about anything... sooo yeah... win-win right? ::)
I dunno if I'll be done, chances are I'll work on it more tomorrow morning in my free class...
That's my plan as well, if I'm not able to finish it by a decent time tonight.
Good luck though!
For your sake, I can post what I have now.
The Evolution of Armor
Armor has served an important role throughout history and by evolving drastically over time, from the early leather design of Egypt, the efficient sword-stopping chain mail in the Middle Ages, to even the most recent body armors such as modern Kevlar and dragon skin, armor has saved countless lives from unnecessary injury and death. Without armor, an unprotected soldier was sure to die in battle. The quality of his equipment and quantity was key to survival, but to understand armor, one must first know the different kinds of armor, and their parts.
Each type of armor has a specific roll to play. Chainmail, for example, is best for close combat, and can handle the slashings of swords. Whereas full plate armor is more suited to horseback riding combat, and is meant to take heavy blows, but has poor maneuverability. All types of armor has its pros and cons and it all depends on how one will be fighting that determines what kind of armor will be used.
Typically full body armor can be broken down into six major groups; head, chest, arms, groin, legs, and footwear. The piece covering your head is called your helmet, or helm which can be accompanied by a visor to protect the eyes and a gorget to protect the neck and clavicle region. A coif would be used for chainmail, which is just a hood made from chain links. For the chest, a breastplate, other known as a cuirass, would be worn along with besagews to protect the shoulder and axillary region. Bracers, which covered the forearms, and spaulders, which covered the upper arm, were used to protect the wearer?s arms and gauntlets were used to protect the hands and wrist area.
(Still editing here, then this next para is to come)
Leather armor was one of the first forms of armor. There were two main kinds of leather armor, cuir bouilli which is treated with oil, and that treated with lacquer. These treatments would allow the leather to be molded into the shape desired, and hardened after drying. A third form, by soaking it in wax was rarely used due to the pricey cost of wax. Leather armor was commonly used as bracers, cuisses and greaves. The advantages to leather armor is that it is light, easy to work with, and won?t overheat the wearer, but it can?t handle heavy blows and is susceptible to damage due to the weather.
I think Dragon Skin should be capitalized since it's the name of the brand.