I need help!!!

[Ciro]

For the love of me... I can't manage to come up with a damn thesis statement about my paper o-o



I'm researching Armor, and all that applies, so, I haven't really picked a specific topic about Armor, so that leaves my thesis statement pretty open. What I was thinking of doing was the history of armor, and how it's evolved, or maybe just the different types of armor.


Help would VERY much be appreciated. >< Cause I've procrastinated, and it's due tomorrow.

[Titan]

For the love of me... I can't manage to come up with a damn thesis statement about my paper o-o



I'm researching Armor, and all that applies, so, I haven't really picked a specific topic about Armor, so that leaves my thesis statement pretty open. What I was thinking of doing was the history of armor, and how it's evolved, or maybe just the different types of armor.


Help would VERY much be appreciated. >< Cause I've procrastinated, and it's due tomorrow.

How about something like

Armor has saved many lives over time, and thanks to breakthroughs in technology it saves more lives everyday.
OR
Armor has played an important part in war thoughout history and has evolved drasticly over time.

Then(assuming its a 5 paragraph paper) Do a section on plate/chain, a section on older flak vest, then one on dragon skin or kevlar or something.

[Chaos]

What type of paper are you writing?  Informative, argumentative, etc.

[Ciro]

Ah, right, good point Chaos, it's an informative

Informative, 4 to 5 pages, double spaced, at least 3 sources (Wiki is not allowed) And she wants our thesis sentence to be pretty long. Like, prolly as long as this post is gonna be, except, it has to all be one sentence. And I'm not allowed to use first person.


and @ Titan, that's what I'm trying to get at, but some how I just can't beef it up enough into a long sentence... >< That's the only thing really holding me back on this paper.


Well, that and finding good reliable sources =/

[Titan]

and @ Titan, that's what I'm trying to get at, but some how I just can't beef it up enough into a long sentence... >< That's the only thing really holding me back on this paper.

How about

Armor has played an important part in war thoughout history and has evolved drasticly over time, from plate armor and chain mail in the middle ages that had a hard time stopping arrows, to recent body armors such as kelvar and dragon skin body armor that can stop a bullet with ease ,and save many lives everyday.

[Ciro]

Thanks so much~! This is what I got from it;

Armor has served an important role throughout history by evolving drastically over time; from the early leather design, the efficient arrow-stopping chain mail in the middle ages, to even the most recent body armors such as kelvar and dragon skin body armor that stop bullets with ease, saving countless lives from death and injury.

but I feel it needs something...

[Lucifer]

Since the beginning of time humanity has been no stranger to battle, whether it be against themselves or the creatures that surround them they've always needed protection, and as time passed and weapons grew in variety the need for armor increased, what began as covering your body in fur quickly lead to suits of metal, and eventually to our modern bullet-stopping kevlar and dragon skin.

I'm a shitty essay writer, I wouldn't be able to write a longer sentence than that, too many damn comas. Anyways heres a couple googled pages on armor, hope they might help.

http://www.themiddleages.net/armor.html
http://www.medieval-castle-siege-weapons.com/history-of-medieval-armor.
http://www.globalsecurity.org/military/systems/ground/body-armor2.htm

[Ciro]

The first link is most helpful, because I'm going to be focusing on more medieval forms.


She said to look for sites that aren't trying to convince you to buy a product too.

[Chaos]

This is just me, but I would worry less the length of the thesis, and more about the message.  The thesis is essentially what you're trying to say in your paper.  Encouraging people to make the thesis statement a run-on sentence strikes me as bad writing form... >_<

[Ciro]

Trust me, if it were up to me, I'd do a short and simple thesis >> But the stupid English teacher wants me to write a long one... which.... doesn't even make sense because it's a THESIS statement! I swear, I have one of the most retarded English teacher's of all time...

[EpicPhailure]

Thanks so much~! This is what I got from it;

Armor has served an important role throughout history by evolving drastically over time; from the early leather design, the efficient arrow-stopping chain mail in the middle ages, to even the most recent body armors such as kelvar and dragon skin body armor that stop bullets with ease, saving countless lives from death and injury.

but I feel it needs something...

Chain-mail didn't stop arrows, it let them through the rings. PLATEMAIL on the other hand, is a different story.

@Lucifer: Lolwut? Dragon skin?

[Ciro]

XD Thanks for bringing that up. Something in the back of my mind told me that wasn't correct, so thanks :3


I need to find a good site that explains the parts of armor, such as the helm, grieves, gauntlets, etc.

[Lucifer]

@Lucifer: Lolwut? Dragon skin?

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Dragon_Skin_(body_armor)

[yottabyte]

Thanks so much~! This is what I got from it;

Armor has served an important role throughout history by evolving drastically over time; from the early leather design, the efficient arrow-stopping chain mail in the middle ages, to even the most recent body armors such as kelvar and dragon skin body armor that stop bullets with ease, saving countless lives from death and injury.

but I feel it needs something...

Chain-mail didn't stop arrows, it let them through the rings. PLATEMAIL on the other hand, is a different story.

@Lucifer: Lolwut? Dragon skin?

Totally offtopic, grats on 1000 posts!  :)

[EpicPhailure]

Thanks so much~! This is what I got from it;

Armor has served an important role throughout history by evolving drastically over time; from the early leather design, the efficient arrow-stopping chain mail in the middle ages, to even the most recent body armors such as kelvar and dragon skin body armor that stop bullets with ease, saving countless lives from death and injury.

but I feel it needs something...

Chain-mail didn't stop arrows, it let them through the rings. PLATEMAIL on the other hand, is a different story.

@Lucifer: Lolwut? Dragon skin?

Totally offtopic, grats on 1000 posts!  :)

NOOO. If I realized it was my 1000th post, I would've made it more meaningful D: Oh well. Thanks.